“Poetry is the music of the soul”-Voltaire
True, but there is more to building a poem than laying words down on a blank page. It’s an art, and the art to it is to translate what you are burning to say and translate it using your vocabulary and tricks like rhyme, assonance, dissonance, meter and rhythm to compel your reader to believe what you say.
I keep reiterating the fact that I am new to form and form writing. There are forms I like, but before Christmas I hadn’t a clue what a troich or a spondee where. I’ve been playing with form a while, and am more than willing to put my work up for the critique today up at one stop poetry. The task today is to turn a free verse poem into meter, or form.
I’ve learnt that there is more to poetry than writing it dow, straight from the heart, or from the burning pit in your belly when you really want to say something. There are tools that we can use to strengthen what we want to say, and I think, or rather I hope that my free verse has benefitted from it also.
Here’s the original for you:
over seas we dance
dreams our only remedy
both aching, always
for more than shared words
an emotional voicemail
for moments of surrender
slowly simmering anticipation
lips collide feverently
exploring, intriguing knowing
Our lives intermingle
to join souls as one
Turn it into iambic diameter:
It’s over seas
we yearn to skip
our dreams only
then rhyming couplets in tetrameter
It’s over seas we yearn to skip
and only dreams will let me slip
into your arms-a parody
your love the only remedy
The musicality of the poem changes at once.
It’s over seas we yearn to dance and skip
and only dreams transport and let me slip
into your loving arms a parody
your love provides the only remedy
You can then play with the stresses to cause anapests and trochees if you wish to do so.
Over seas, where you wait let me dance, let me skip
In my dreams, I transport come to you then I slip
Into arms strong and warm, but I wake, parody
It’s the love that you share that provides remedy
I’m hoping that Gay can comment here, as I have difficulty coping with anything other than pentameter!
I still don’t understand a lot of the terminology, dactyl to me is a dinosaur, Pyrrhic sounds like a virus! But I’m willing and ready to learn!