To touch a smile,
Kiss the creases where the lips curl
And form tiny dimpled lines.
An impossibility.
Reality
murders me softly.
Chained by apathy,
Anchored in burnt ochre earth
Feet tied to the place we farewelled.
Here I remained.
Antipathy.
My eyes can’t look at you any other way.
They sting,
burn,
cry.
Stuck where we said goodbye.
To stroke the sun kissed skin
of your broad shoulders
freckled
by the loving hateful halo of light.
My fingertips-
Anticipating.
Loneliness was never part of the plan
Heart wrenching pain
Screaming
Re-iterating
Emptiness.
Howling to the four winds
Cursing to gods of nothingness
False low currs
As the vultures circle
And I await to die
Here
Where you said goodbye.
Kill me softly
With hands bound
But mind free.
Just touch the smile
and remember
me.
A couple of poems this week, I started thinking about debt believe it or not and then it spiralled to divorce being a single mum and everything. I guess it came out in my writing. Sometimes life in metaphor is easier than straight lines.
Why not submit your own poem? One Stop Poetry, the site that kicked my ass into gear…;)
Musings and Smatterings 
Love the first stanza and the reference to burnt ochre earth. A lot of great images sprinkled throughout.
Thanks Matt, good to see you back this week, and we picked different muses for thie Wednesday 😉
Romantic, harsh, romantic tone – good, reader-grabbing and shaking them work.
romantic and strong…beautiful imagery.
Thanks David, I was aiming for dark. Maybe I’ll have to try again?
Love the emotion, anger but embers of feeling
all of these elements create a creative hotbed
Nice work for One shot
Thanks from the Moon
Cheers hun, I guess my mind took a trip!
Such a forelorn feeling this leaves. Nicely done.
Awww! This was so heartbreaking. Who hasn’t wanted the world to simply stop when someone we loved left us? Beautiful.
How long can one endure the torture of love turning to ashes? A familiar theme but deftly handled with haunting images. Well done. Gay @beachanny
Lets hope that after the burn, a rose will bloom again somewhere 😉 Thanks Gay
False low currs
As the vultures circle
And I await to die
Here
Where you said goodbye.
Almost invokes a spiritual collapse. Like being abandoned by your God.
There is a reason certain topics are oft-brushed with poets: emotion, such emotion. You’ve driven a lot of feeling into this work, and into us through it. And it runs the gamut of emotion, for that matter. There is agony, there is love, sadness–very human, very real. Good images, good description, packaged well together for an excellent execution.
I could feel the pain and the terrible sense of loneliness. One never plans to be abandoned 😦
nice one shot!
Hi shan…you fooled me with the blog change but not with the words…when we start on our journeys we never imagine how things can turnout…your words were chosen brilliantly…and the read was a perfect…chin up my friend..pete
Fancied a change of scene, and Snowdon in winter seemed to fit the bill for me 😉 Just letting my mind wander rhetorically, and after many many edits, this is what became of it.
S
Really tangible sorrow here. I know it’s tough but we can try to move on ❤
Lots of emotional depth here. I like the feeling of surrender at the end, becoming resolute to the inevitible. Nice piece.
wow…the reality murders me…stanza crushed me…perhpas it just found me where i am ….nice write…
anchored, chained, tied…lots of strong images of not being able to move without the other, the one, who’s missed so much.
a beautiful poem on a sad topic, crafted with just the right dose of emotion. really liked it
I liked the poem.. full of emotions and feelings.. well done.. came through One shot poetry ..
Oops! Its One Stop Poetry..sorry for the error..
Beautiful… I remembered with this the song which I loved ‘Killing me softly with her song’… and your words are so poignant… and I relate with this one very much… ‘Feet tied to the place we farewelled.’
Farewelled… what a neat use…
Thanks for sharing…
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Deep!Vivid!Strong!Emotions pull you as you read!Leaves the reader no doubt of what you feel.
Striking one shot!
hI sHAN!!! I can relate to your poem .. I can feel it…..
your pain was so evident here…and it grabbed at my heart. gorgeous writing.
So touching so true.. goodbye’s are like death – everytime..
wow… brilliant imagery! Each line I read, I was gasping for air… emotionally charged and provoking an ahce in me that I didn’t know I had. I loved these lines especially
“Reality
murders me softly.
Chained by apathy,” and
“Loneliness was never part of the plan
Heart wrenching pain
Screaming
Re-iterating
Emptiness.”
very powerful indeed! “Sometimes life in metaphor is easier than straight lines.” well said!
Your words left me breathless, Shan. Every romantic relationship I’ve had has ended with so much pain, and you describe it beautifully. Painfully, but beautifully.