The afterglow of intercourse burns gold,
entangled limbs in tenderness retreat
elation’s warmth cannot be oversold
orgasmic undulations uncontrolled
this room cocooned, all else is obsolete
the afterglow of intercourse burns gold
each cell is spent in effort, now we mould
to one again, in stillness of the beat
elations warmth cannot be oversold
in quiet time emotions here unfold
two bodies pressed in more enticing heat,
the afterglow of intercourse burns gold
for moments, I am beautiful and bold
this body gives up quaking in defeat
elation’s warmth cannot be oversold
no words are needed, stories yet untold
just lay with me upon this crumpled sheet
the afterglow of intercourse burns gold,
elation’s warmth cannot be oversold.
Remember I threatened to write a response to lovely Luke Praters Coitus non Circum? well here it is in it’s original villanelle form. Thanks Luke for being such a good sport through this!
Orgasms are great aren’t they? 
Affirmanatus ‘LIKE’ both of Orgasm and poetry Shan!
Ah carpe diem then Pierre!
Great response Shan, giving the woman’s point of view. Here’s the original one (also in villanelle form, though I rewrote it as free verse also), on the male side of sex –
http://lukepraterswordsalad.com/2010/08/23/coitus-non-circum-the-great-mismatch/
There are some terrific lines here, Shan. “Afterglow of intercourse” reminds me of “Agenbite of inwit”:) A delight.
Love it – a perfect, perfect counterpart to Luke’s write. Very impressive, S. You are a talented (albeit, horny) poet – lol
The afterglow of intercourse burns gold… molten sexuality expressed in an empowering way. Agree with Sheila. lol …The world blocked out in a liberating cocoon—great imagery. And yes, they are
ah you played well off of lukes…very nice shan…you start strong in that opening image of the afterglow…marvelous imagery through out
Powerful poem and conveys the passion of the moment quite well.
hmm – the afterglow burns gold..nice image shan…have to jump over to luke’s to read the male side…smiles
My long lost friend, THIS is a brilliant response to Mr. Wordsalad. I have enjoyed both his in form and free verse, and thought this fantastic! You’ve nailed the form perfectly, which alone deserves a standing O (sorry, pun intended, lol) And no worries at about the absence…One would naturally assume you’re living life, soaking up the inspiration, and returning with your awesome writes as a result.
Thanks for the visit and the write!
Absolutely love this Shân. Wonderful refrain lines, always the backbone of a great villanelle. Bydew ‘n ddigon cariad.
Lovely Villanelle Shan. Exquisite! ~ Rose
How deft your iambs and sweeping your villanelle, how passionate your words! How far you’ve come in such few short months to become an accomplished poet. If anyone wants to see the results of hard work and a curious mind, I would direct them here. I am so very proud of you! Excellent work, Shan.
Gay
I love this poem, and have a double villanelle somewhere on my blog. Steamy SHan, but beyond subject, the writing is superb. Very visual, great word choices and line development, and pace, which is very important.
Great work.
Thank you for your visit Henry, very happy to see you here, I wanted to give a ladies point of view, glad you enjoyed the read
Well done Shan…a great response to Luke and wonderful take on the warmth of bodies and delights of loving entwined….bkm
Thankyou Barbara, I like giving the ladies point of view for an overall picture!
Aah..yeas I remmeber it exactly as you write..you nailed the after feeling.
Well done,Shan. Enjoyed this one shot….
Romantic One Shot. (And yes, they are!)
gawd. do you always have to TALK, after?
hehehehe
Ooohh…lovely! Sooo warm and sensuous… gurgling with tender feelings… FELT this one, Shan… really lovely!
“this room cocooned, all else is obsolete” — now that is THE perfect way to put it… (sigh…)
This is just soothing and lovely…
orgasmic undulations uncontrolled…
Love you art works
Shân,
I am in rapture your words were so vivid and euphoric.
xoxo
Jessica
What she said.
I really liked this. Great imagery and passion.
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